Skylar Starpaw Trealo

[Sky]

Name: Skylar Starpaw Trealo
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Species: Fox
Occupation: Assassin

Physical Appearance:
Skylar is a pretty average sized fox. His fur color is a light brown, very normal and a little dull. The only thing interesting about his appearance is a star shaped patch of fur on his paw, the reason his name is what it is. His clothes are all black; a black shirt, black pants, and a black belt.

Possessions:
His weapons are a set of dual swords, one on each side of his belt. He also carries a black napsack on his back that contains rope, a grappling hook, poison, ink and quill, and a small journal as well as food and water.

Personality:
Sky is a pretty quiet person. He doesn't like to talk much, only when he has to. He's not very afraid of things or other people. He's a skilled killer, an assassin of sorts. He doesn't really enjoy killing people, but it's his job. The only thing he really enjoys is writing poetry. It's odd, and no one knows about it, but he's a good poet, even when his subject matter is usually dark.


Strengths:
Sky is very determined when it comes to pretty much anything. Being an assassin calls for a fit physique, and this makes him very physically strong. Although no one sees his work, and he doesn't think so, Sky is a decent poet. Perhaps not the best, but good.

Weaknesses:
He's emotionally sensitive, and has a slow metabolism so he really has to watch how much he eats and at times this food restriction can leave him feeling tired when he shouldn't be. Terrified of thunder and other loud noises, so much so that he'll drop whatever he's doing and curl into a ball.

History:
Sky was the seventh son of a large family of foxes. He had, of course, six older siblings(three brothers and three sisters), as well as four younger ones(three brothers, and two sisters). His parents were gypsies of a sort, and he remembers always being on the move in their caravans. They were a cunning and wicked group of performers, tricking people out of their money and teaching their youngsters to pick pockets at an early age. The Trealo kids were quick to learn that if they didn't steal enough money or food they would be beaten. It was a scary way to grow up, knowing your parents didn't care for you and that they would beat and starve you without a second thought. When Skylar was eleven years old, he was beaten black and blue by his father for stealing only two copper coins. That was when he decided he had had enough, that he would run away.
He woke up his younger brothers and sisters that night to say goodbye. He remembers tearfully promising them that he would come back for them one day. And he left, with a days worth of food and a handful of coins stolen from his parents chest.

Wandering through the woods for a few weeks, surviving only on foraged berries and nuts, he finally arrived at a small village. As ragged and gaunt-faced as this young fox was, few reached out a helping paw. Until he finally stumbled across a small, crooked abode, in which lived an aging fox named Forbeaux, and sometimes his son, who remained nameless the entire time Sky knew him. Forbeaux was a mean old character, and no one particularly liked him; but he was the only creature willing to let Sky live with him in exchange for help with his foraging, fishing, wood-chopping, and other such chores that he had, in his old age, increasing difficulty doing properly.
When the old fox's son was home, Sky expressed an interest in fighting, and the son, a tall and sleek black fox, started teaching him the basics. In the following four months, the elder fox grew sick and died. His son took Sky in as his very own apprentice assassin, and taught him everything he knew. When Sky was sixteen the black fox took him out to kill his first marks. Ever since then, he's been refining his techniques and perfecting his skill. He rarely sees the black fox anymore.

Relationships:
The Trealo gypsies.

[DanceMastah]

;)Good.

[Sky]

Thanks

[Tracy]

You have a good start. He's a pretty average character all around, so I won't be too tough on my critique.

I'd like to see a little more in strengths and weaknesses. Strengths can be something as silly as being a talented poet (as you mentioned in personality) It's always a good idea to tie together all the ideas in your bio. There definitely needs to be another weakness though. And also expand on the ones you have. For example, how does a slow metabolism hurt him? Normally this would cause someone to be overweight, but you said he's of average size.

For history, I'd really like to see more about what's happened since he left his family. You should be able to add at least one more healthy-sized paragraph here. Where has he gone? Who has he met? How has he trained? What has he learned how to do specifically? Who is hiring him?

See to these concerns and I'll take a second look at your character. =)

[Tracy]

Great, thanks for paying attention to my critiques! Now, when you play him, be careful not to powerplay. His skills are -good- but he's fairly average. And he's young.

Otherwise, looks good and he's accepted!