Lord Phineas of the Ironclaw

[Grath]

Hello Farrel. I apologize for the delay.

Now I've read this, and he seems supremely powerful to me. We don't even have our badgerlords so awesomely powerful. I'm going to ask you to scale him back a little, give him a little balance.

I like him, but he needs a little of that aforesaid balance. ^^

[Directed by M. Night Shyamalan]

Of course, I will comply then.

There, I have scaled him down a bit. He now only takes on five at a time, and when the bloodlust leaves him he is exhausted and vulnerable.

[Eastpaw]

Ok. Still need the balancing. That bloodlust bit. Becoming as common as grass around here, especially the 'weakness' attached to it. Please give him some more believable weaknesses, something original.

The iron claws. Cats shed layers of their claws as they grow, much as you or I would cut our nails, so a permanent iron layer would eventually cripple him, or tear out a good chunk of claw as it falls off from its own weight.

He seems so flat and one-sided. War is all he knows. I challenge you to give him a little more depth. He hated reading, but he loves math. He's interested in science, or reading the stars. He's a king from a long line of kings, perhaps give him some refinement.

[Directed by M. Night Shyamalan]

Ok, I've removed the iron claws and spiced up his personality alot.

[Grath]

accepted