Rogg Streambattle

[tacticalotter2]

Hi! I am kind of new to RPing so if I mess up in any way please tell me! Thanks!


Name: Rogg Streambattle
Gender: Male
Age: 26
Species: River Otter ( Lutra Canadensis)
Occupation: Mercenary/Assassin

Physical Appearance: Average otter, medium brown fur with brownish white on the lower half of his face, thought and chest. Big, strong but not a giant. Thick tail [no duh], webbed paws [double no duh]. Has a tattoo that says "Press on and never weaken" on his right paw in old otter script. Liquid brown eyes that seem to peer into one's very soul. Wears black gloves.


Possessions: Carries a short sword and an engraved dagger as weapons. Normally wears flat black arm and torso light armor or a brown vest. Also has a waterproof cloak. Has a good supply of hot root pepper. Has two eel skin water canteens. Also has a pair of slim black gloves.

Personality: Very kind and fun loving, loves to swim [what otter doesn't?], and fight. Can be ruthless at cynical at times but is usually merciful. Prone to get easily depressed but snaps out of it quickly. Jokes a lot, sometimes at other beast's expense, but feels bad about it and attempts to make up for it. Does not really like badgers and hares. Prefers to be with a group rather than alone (preferably otters). Enjoys good food and friends. Loves hot root, he sprinkles it on nearly everything he eats. Likes to visit Redwall for the good vittles.

Strengths: Leadership ability. Kind.


Weaknesses: Fairly gullible. Shows mercy.

Skills: Expert swords beast. Uses his sword in an unorthodox but effective reverse-style grip. Can use just about any weapon he can get his paws on. Great swimmer [I'm sorry I just couldn't resist putting that in there]. Fairly good archer. Also an expert eater.


History: Rogg Streambattle was born on Green Isle and had a happy young life growing up on the lush island. When he turned 18 he joined the Otter Guard and quickly rose through the ranks and became a lethal weapon for the defense of Green Isle.

Unfortunately he became tired of taking orders and answered the call that all otters must; he began to travel. He left his home, his family and his love Firiwen, to search for adventures.

He soon discovered that he could make a good life for himself if he became a mercenary, so thats what he did. He took up many contracts from many different factions and soon became one of the most feared assassins in the region.

Relationships: He loved Silenis Wildlough back on Green Ilse. Had a brother named Tharin Streambattle that he was good friends with.

[Vikenti Whitedeath]

First of all, welcome to Legends of Redwall Abbey! I hope you have lots of fun role-playing and can stay active for a long time!

It looks good! I can't approve it my-self but I am sure staff we be around sometime to check it. One thing that needs a little fixing is the history. Galileo (a lead staff member) will want you to divide it into paragraphs. There all also a few other things I can point out. What exactly is the Commonwealth? From your description it sounds like a kingdom but you mignt want to describe it better. For instance, what sort of beasts live there? Are they all otters? Another thing is the Great War. Who was the Commonwealth fighting? Also the Spectre program. It sounds like an assassin training program but a little clarification is needed there as well. The last thing I notice is strengths and weaknesses. The rules state you may have only one more strength than weakness. You have seven strengths and three weaknesses. I know its hard but you need to get rid of some strengths or add some weaknesses. When your done, run the spell-checker. I think I saw a few spelling mistakes. No problem though, we all do it.

Now, I may seem a bit harsh but I'm not that bad a guy. Its the rules of the site. Again, I hope you have fun!

(P.S. 29 years is actually 116 seasons. I know Brian used seasons but just stick to human ages here )

[Abbot Vivian]

I like your style, but I need to point out some things in need of correcting before I can approve this.

You spelled carries as carry's in your possessions.

You need Ashstripe's permission to include having interacted with the Badger Lord of Salamandastron because Ashstripe owns that character, Ashstripe.

I'd like you to space your paragraphs apart in your history.

The Redwall equivalent of leather is eelskin or so I have come to assume.

I also request you lengthen his personality and appearance a bit.

[Vikenti Whitedeath]

Ok Galileo! He is done now!

[tacticalotter2]

Say what?

[Vikenti Whitedeath]

You are done aren't you?

[Abbot Vivian]

Approved!

(Please don't pester me, Merce, I'm doing what I can.)